Great story man! Lol, you're so underrated, can't wait to buy the finished product of this from Amazon in a year or two!

Perhaps include the commentary in the poetry?
I dunno, I gave it a null. Too short :P

Oh crap, another blank review; dreadfully sorry, here's the review I would've typed, so sorry....
The Pros:
I like the cocky attitude the MC has; he's trying to show up his friends by knocking on the door of the haunted mansion, which he isn't afraid of... probably cuz his granparents live there XD.
Derived plenty from this; in particular, 'egging me on' could mean they qere ready to launch some fire upon the hous... (read more)

The Pros:
Very clear-cut, very easy to understand; the hardest part of reading is comprehension rather than appreciation, so you have the first part of writing down pat. I like how you follow up to the tagline; point is understood quickly. Good choice of words, even if relatively simple. Broad topic,
The Cons:
Some lines didn't work for me; 'When, at last mine eyes' and 'Love that burned' yadayadayada. It w... (read more)

Oh crap I'm sorry, I accidentally submitted a blank review. So sorry! I'll have a comment that will count as a review in just a bit, I'm so embarassed...

Error; first line, second stanza should be 'Lessons in school, don't tell me not to be cruel!' My bad.

What I mean though is, there are a lot of strict guidelines as far as the communication goes in certain instances; for example, informality isn't appreciated from anybody who is a position of high power or anybody who doesn't approve of 'inappropriate language'. This being around 75% of 'civilized folk', it's apparent that such a regulation of profanity is encouraged and obeyed to some extent. The government doesn't engage directly in the ... (read more)

Agreeing with Simey; it's like one of the vocal tracks in the background of 'Money', you know? Cool, surreal piece, liked it very much.

Whoops, put undecisive, instead of indecisive. And the irony, while I was chiding you on spelling :)

Thanks for the review, anyway. I'll work on that third song.

Good, solid, to the point story. Hope to see more of your stuff here.

Well, it's influenced heavily by Metallica's "For Whom the Bell Tolls". So it's metal.

Very good. "This is the house of lies and guilt"... Awesome line.

You're one of the best writers here, that's for sure. Good story.

If I grew a pair of tits, I'm sure they'd be much nicer than in that picture.

That twist slapped me. Great job.

I thought I've met some real assholes in my days. But you certainly take the cake, Incremental. If you had an inkling as to how to write quality literature, maybe then you could go around bashing everybody's hard work. However, you fail to do so. Therefore, I suggest you take a good long time thinking, then come back and give out some real criticism, not this bullshit, alright?

Messed up title, Burnt Grass. Apologies.

Woops, forgot to put a review title. Just consider it "Can they just make out already?"

Sorry, forgot to put 'Revised' in the title. My bad.

Great job, really enjoyed this one. You have a talent for poetry, don't give it up!

Like a Rage Against the Machine track. I liked it.

Good job. Thanks for the read!

Good series so far.

Great stuff, man.

To add to my positive review, the Wikipeida-article-gone-hackerz was a great sub-plot. If you get my jive.

Burn.

Loving the story so far. Keep it up.

Interesting piece. Good job.

My kind of story. I liked it.

Enjoyable, sensual, good story. I liked it.

A little short; it didn't really sastify my thirst for more explanation. But it still is an interesting series at that. You're taking plenty of liberties with the original, I see.

Deceptively simple, you mean. Great job.

Writers writing about writers always produces a favorable story. Good job.

I thought it was pretty good. Nice job.

I don't know about this one, so I'm not going to vote on it. But it was a pretty interesting article; I hope to see more of your stuff on the site!

Seems liek we've been getting a bunch of articles about tea and coffee, aren't we? I'm going to stay neutral on this one, but don't be discouraged just because one person doesn't vote on it.

Good starting point. I can't wait for the second chapter!

A metaphor for life. I liked it.

Stylistic and unique. Nice job.

Nice. You've got a very good character on your hands; he's crazy and entertaining, as is the story.

Conceptual awesomeness. Good job.

Although I'm probably not going to Germany in the near future, that would've been a good thing to read before the trip there. Thank you!

Very delayed. A few three months off, lol.

That's what she said.

Oh, and sick pic, too.

A little scary, and really funny. Great job of fusing the two.

I didn't like the extreme lack of details, but it's a cool concept. Can't wait for the next part!

Shameless bump.

What I was going at was copyrights that are owned by Disney. But nevermind.

Very good. A true poem to the end.

A modern day remix of Alice and Wonderland might be stepping on some copyrights, but it's a cool concept, nonetheless. Add on to it and we'll see how the cookie crumbles.

Good. I can envision your environment just from your words.

A good idea, but I wasn't too keen on it looking like one paragraph. Separation is important in stories. And it wasn't connected real well; you need to slow down and keep your ideas from spilling onto paper too quickly.

Interesting. A short story from the viewpoint of a baby. I liked it. Your only problem is length. If this were, say, four times longer, it would be even better.

Dude. That was funny. Kudos.

Thanks for positive feedback.

The shortness has a point, manox. Don't just read the words on the page, because there's meaning behind them. Think about it before you give me a poor score.

I was going for a vibe similar to Just a Puddle with this one, but I guess I messed it up. Sorry, I like making good pieces of writing, and I'll try harder next time I go serious.

That's what she said.

Wow. This is a piece a shit.

Chaotic theory, guess what. That paragraph with the periods? That was intended as the guy's shallow breathing when he wakes up from his nightmare.

Oops, at the beginning I forgot to put He was tired. My bad.