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drip;

drip;

drip; drip; drip;

 
Author's Commentary
Some poetry, because Crowley feels there's not enough of it recently : )

Nothing too serious...
Felt like getting out of a writing rut,
so I just reached into the air, and pulled down this.
Don't take the poem literally, of course.

(for a better look at the display picture, go here:
http://xxpanthernovaxx.deviantart.com/art/Still-life-2-23309300
really great photograph by a friend of mine. Took him forever to get it right.)
There’s a leaking faucet,
and I hear it drip;
It’s in my mind,
and I hear it drip;
I can’t turn it off,
and I hear it drip;
I try to fix the damn thing,
and I hear it drip;
The pipes are rusted,
and I hear it drip;
I can’t find a plumber,
and I hear it drip;
I’m losing water all the while,
and I hear it drip;

drip;
drip;
drip;
drip;
drip;
Could someone
drip;
please come;
drip;
and fix this
drip;
damn faucet?
drip;
Come in
drip;
to my home
drip;
and stop
drip;
the leak?
drip;
The door will
drip;
be open
drip;
for you.
drip;
 
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  • Drip...drip...drip...
    Posted Mar 9, 2009
    +2
    I liked your wording. It was informal, but it worked. Nice job!

    Making the poem a little longer and/or editing and/or using stronger words can definitely perk up the piece. Try it!

    Overall, it was enjoyable! (read more)
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  • Date Added
    • Jan 29, 2009 at 1:10 AM
  • Article Type
    • Literature
  • Genres
    • Poetry
  • Topics
    • Pain, Miscellaneous
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