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'Wuh?' Is Right...
Posted Jun 30, 2009
The Pros
You've got some funny bits here and there; I liked the quote by the complete stranger at the beginning, gives him much more character than just being a stranger. It's also tickling that your MC has no idea what's going on most of the time; thus the ambiguous title then, right? That's where there are problems...
The Cons
Although I derive that the point of this story is to be utterly confusing and plot warpingly strange, it didn't really work on me the way you expected. The randomness and unusual method of plot progression just make me confuzzled, rather than intrigued. There's almost no dialogue to clarify the events taking place, and when the chracters do speak, it's ideal chit-chat, not any illuminating revelations like I would've liked to have stuff be understood. Also, the uneven spacing between bodies of text seem unnecessary.
Final Thoughts
The story needs to some clearing up, to be frank; for the reader to enjoy what he/she reads, they need to understand everything you're saying. Hope to see more of your stuff soon.
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