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Trying to Connect/Her

Trying to Connect/Her

For somebody with green eyes.

 
Author's Commentary
I wrote this for her. If she ever reads it I'll be surprised haha. I hope she would like it though.
…and your hair is like the sun
Water falling down a great peak,
The mountainside brightly gleaming;
And your skin is like ocean sand
Unwashed by tide, with happy footprints
Sparkling the glistening terrain;
And your eyes,
They are emeralds of green field
Wind dancing through thick grass
And swimming towards shady trees
To rest for a moment and admire
True beauty.
 
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  • Read it to her...
    Posted Mar 23, 2009
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    I think this becomes good because it is a deeply personal and touching poem. It is meant for one person and it doesn't really matter what the rest of us think!
    The imagary is good and manages to give me a vision of a girl.....wonder if it matches the reality...

    and and and and... (read more)
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  • Date Added
    • Mar 18, 2009 at 7:24 PM
  • Article Type
    • Literature
  • Genres
    • Poetry
  • Topics
    • Romance, People
  • Overall Statistics
    • 131 Views
    • 1 Votes
  • Site Rankings
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Newest Addition
March 20, 2010
 
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