Tira'Ferma Sciences - History Part 1

It was an interesting piece. I like science-y stuff, so this was pretty enjoyable to read. It looks like a pretty good intro. Would get me into the book.

For the more general things:
You should mention "Ladon's" first name, at least once.
The third paragraph is almost completely unnecessary. It's extremely redundant after the second paragraph. Same for the first sentence of the fourth paragraph. Find a way to work that out.
You need to find other words for "good" and "evil". You use those words a lot near the end.
Also, certain parts could use a bit more explanation.

Down to the knitty-gritty
In the second paragraph (and onward) you refer to the dimensions as being "The same." Try using fresher language. It gets kind of repetitive to use the same words.
Also, in the second paragraph, you say "Physics affect everything." I'm pretty sure it would be Physics affectS. Physics is a singular noun, there's no thing as a "physic".
Also, I see what you're trying to do with the final line, but it doesn't come across strong enough. Try rephrasing it, maybe.

Pretty interesting. I'll try to get to the other parts asap...
Sorry the "cons" section is so long, especially compared to the "pros."
But I think, if you want to make this piece happen, more indepth critiquing will help.

Good luck!

This is well written and does provide some technical details about the 'universe', elements etc. The writing is logical and does take you through the 'theory' pretty well.

My first thought is - why? While this is interesting (to a certain extent), it would probably stop me from reading on, as it seems to have no relevance. I guess you're trying to introduced the idea of 'evil' at an elemental level, but feel this could be achieved in less 'space' and within the full novel.

You say this is a foreward to the full novel - you therefore need to graps my interest from the beginning, introduce the world, the creatures, the history etc, rather than trying to give me a science lesson on where the Universe came from.

While this is well written, it does not graps my attention. The idea of a 'foreward' is to give me a glimpse of what is to come, and to make me want to read on. This really left me saying 'why?'