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This is one of the most simple poems I've ever read, but it conveys so much in every line it's beautiful. The last stanza was wonderful. Very powerful piece

The language was a turn off at first, but i kept reading because i've really enjoyed you're stuff before and i understood why it was written like this after a few stanzas.

Very powerful interesting and great idea. I loved it

I enjoyed how it seemed as though it were written by the actual person itself instead of a poet trying to put himself in that perspective.

No cons. If there are. I can't think of any.

I'm awestruck at how well you seemed to have put yourself in the shoes of the subject.

I think that as an experimental piece (I sure haven't seen this done before) it meets with success in terms of communicating a unique first-person perspective from the position of a handicapped person.

If the reader finds themselves in those shoes without any warning whatsoever, then the poem is successful. Good writing just happens to the reader, like this poem.

Also, about the theive thing, I think if you read it taking into account the phonetic quality of the entire poem, it hits you properly. It's a perfect anagram for thieve with the first and last letters in place, meaning it's one the brain will unscramble, most human beings' brains jingle a bit when they unscramble something because they wonder if a mistake was made.

In the same way, it's probably a stretch, the perspective we're taking on in the poem is one that is equally unsure if a mistake has been made. My eyes focussed an extra second on the word, which almost slowed the tempo a notch, which fit with the rest. That was cool, but maybe an accident?

I few rhythmic suggestions:

its y they laf wif me
wen I had to leev skool

I think a 'the' before skool works more fluently if you read it once with it and once without it.

jus send me to mum
but they say im to old

Maybe a 'my' before mum. Read it both ways.

'dont know at i did' was meant as 'dont know wat i did'?

Good work, very original and engaging.

Polish it.

This is an extremely unique piece of work. You really let yourself become the character here and it shows through brilliantly. Incredibly, it still flows well despite the odd style you've used, to kudos to that.

I'm not sure if its because of the spelling or because I'm thick or what, but I don't quite get the bit about the pretty girls in the third stanza.

Unique and introspective....pretty sad as well. Well written piece overall, just didn't understand that one bit.

Being objective - this was written in an interesting voice and the voice was vivid and once you got used to it, you could imagine the speaker. The them was strong and it flowed well. The tempo was Ok (See cons).

It has an underlying sadness that comments on society and this does make it intriguing.

While the tempo was OK, I found that the 'voice' made it harder to read - I had to double-read a couple of times to understand what was being said. 'Thieve' - I kept on thinking - thief...then finally realized - they've....the 'i' put me of....perhaps 'dave'...hmmm...difficult!

Personally I'm not a huge fan of these type of poems (but I do see the skills and do realize that there is an audience for them).

I have to admit that I wasn't overly fond of this poem - the message contained in it was good, but the 'voice' just didn't do it for me. Having said that, I do applaud the 'style' - I can imagine it is difficult to get this right.

I gave a thumbs up due to the 'uniqueness' and the great concept of writing something in a voice that adds to the feel of the poem. It's not 'my cup of tea' but I do see the value!

Really interesting style, so it's almost odd to critique. Once I get into the swing of it, I really like how the flow sailed along, and how you played the words and theme.
A significant theme in this.
I... can't think of much else to say. You hit on something interesting here, and it's hard to put words together to describe a lot of it in any sort of conventional means.

Nothing, really

Again, you amaze me with your work.
Good job. I am, again, impressed.