The Green Fairy

what i enjoyed about this poem also appears in the cons section but I disagree with one of the other reviewers who said he thought you were heavy handed with the punctuation. if you did it on purpose and if it is part of the meaning the almost staccato, I'm not sure if I'm spelling that right, nature of the lines is an interesting way to show the stream of conciousness during drunken moments

there are two cons but one is a niggle I don't like the word feasted it doesn't fit its too meaty if you know what i mean. maybe something with sibilants.

the second problem is with the aspect of the poem i enjoyed the punctuation. if you were going for that i applaud you but if it's not your intention is robs the poem of a sort of prettiness that it could have.

do another draught

Interesting poem...
Really interesting language, interesting concept.
It feels like random babbling... not in a bad way.

The only thing i would change would be when you said "feasted on her tears"
Feasted doesn't feel right there so much...
Maybe something a bit more subtle?

It looks like something that could fit into a bigger piece, with some context.
But not a bad poem on its own.

Absinthe much?

It's kind of hard to say there are strengths to a poem of this size. You didn't do anything major wrongs and I liked it, so there's the thumbs up for you.

The last lines aren't in sync with the rest of the poem. It works as an ending but I like to see poems stay consistent

Hopefully we'll see some more drunken poetry.