The Bad Live

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Club beats
Strictly dictating a few
Descents;
Words of shallowness
Can make the most
Of a date

Empty chambers,
Laughing echoes around my world,
Emitting false;
Girls with small goals
Can be quite the trip,
The best night ever

Birds chirp,
And the next time I’ll
Be sure;
When they scream,
Keep the windows open,
Light a match too….

• Hmm...?

  by JairTollet

  Posted Jun 9, 2009
  null
  Your descriptions were clear, but a little short.
  
  I was rather confused throughout the entire thing. Many of the sentences didn't flow together or make sense by each other.
  
  Work on it a little more, and try to make the sentences flow together. (read more)

• Date Added
• Jun 8, 2009 at 10:26 AM
• Article Type
• Literature
• Genres
• Abstract, Other
• Topics
• People, Pain
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