Survival

Thought the description is very good. I could see the things described in my mind. The writing is well done. The suspense of what was going to happen to the main character kept me interested

The use of the first person POV kept the suspense to a lesser level for me, since I knew he wouldn't die.

Story was slightly on the long side for me, but not so much that it caused a problem.

A very enjoyable read.

This is certainly a remarkable feat in writing. One of the best stories I've read; I connected with both characters, even without their names being revealed.

The story was a bit long. But I was entranced by how you paced it, the complexities, the precise details, of how you revealed the plot in a spectacular piece by piece manner. No other cons.

Awesome story. Looking forward to your future works of art.

Descriptions were over the top. Very easy to visualize just about everything that you described. The continuity of the article was also good, you didn't jump from place to place a lot. Very limited grammatical errors as well.

Holy Crap! That was so long. I had to push myself to finish it. Though the descriptions were good, they were a bit excessive. Some things didn't need to have about 4 different adjectives/adverbs describing one thing.

Try to limit the descriptive powers that you have. Though they are good, they seemed to overpower the article's content, because you had 2 sentences describing something, then 1 sentence of actual story.

Have to give some serious props for your ability to describe situations, objects, actions, and people very well. Gave me a great mental image. Story felt realistic; I found myself having the same thoughts as the victim, which was a cool feeling. Had a great a hook, drew me in very quickly. Nothing wrong with your writing mechanics, it's all there.

Although you are great at describing, at times it seemed that it took too long and I found myself losing the attention span necessary to plow through a paragraph describing something simple. The characters felt static, didn't have enough life in them to make them special and interesting. They just played out their role to carry the plot. The killer felt weak to me, too cliche. I've heard of this guy a thousand times before. The overall story took a little too long to get to the chase for my own good, and it became a struggle keeping my interest on the article to make it to the end.

Keep the awesome descriptions, but save them for the more important moments, unless you plan on writing a novel. Shorten things up and work on the characters more, give them some much needed life, make them dynamic! Get me to seriously care about them. Good job, I can tell you put some serious work into this which is fantastic, keep it up! People really interested in this style and topic are going to have a fun read.

Generally well written
Good description.
Flowed well.

The narrative voice you employed didn't really do much for me ( but that's a personal thing and is just a case of opinion, others will like it, I just don't for some reason) apart from that nothing to complain about

Not much to add really. Well done for writing this though.