Simple Love Story

hahaha! excellently written, hilarious, very original. Was not expecting this kind of story at all.

...all i can really say that will some up this story is LMAO

not much really....but i don't think you should have started the story with once upon a time and just the general flow of the first paragraph, but....IT WAS FUCKING FUNNY SO WHO CARES!?

Great story. Awesome read and well worth the time to have a look at.

Very unexpected and original, hilarious!

Without a doubt, this is the kind of writing that most people would expect to see in a place like Newgrounds or 4chan, where humor always prevails over decency and nothing is acceptable unless it involves tits. On the other hand, when the average internet-goer thinks "writing community," they probably think fan fiction, poetry, and a bunch of pretentious young writers who think they're the next Anne Rice or Dean Koonts. (No offense Papertank, I still love you.)

Needless to say, although I am no stranger to Justin's brand of humor, this surprised me... in a good way. Papertank needs more humor, as well as serious literature, because a good laugh is what the average internet-goer is usually looking for. The fact that this particular writing community accepts humor and parodies, as well as the usual stuff, will probably get us a lot of traffic in the future. (Hell, it already has -- look at Manman's "FAQ.")

The quality of writing in "Simple Love Story," as far as humor goes, is excellent. Nearly every sentence throughout the story is either a joke or a setup for a punchline; no space is wasted on boring details. Even from an artistic standpoint, the writing style is pretty decent, which makes the absurdly inappropriate, almost non-sequitur humor all the more amusing.

When my girlfriend and I first because friends, we would send each other funny YouTube videos on AIM all the time. It's almost like you're making fun of us! I'm offended. (Too bad my version of the story had no hardcore cybering.)

In all seriousness, I have no problems with the story, except for the following sentence in the first paragraph: "And if you called Herald, Samantha, well that just wouldn’t make a lot of sense." I'm not not sure if the use of commas there is correct, and the sentence didn't flow very well. There were a few other things that I would have written differently, too. But who cares?

"Simple Love Story" is very funny, well-written, and best of all, not too long even for the shortest attention span. This should be required reading for every visitor and newcomer to Papertank.