Shangri La

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Follow me to shangri la
all sorrow, lay to rest.
Shining as a distant star
where god thought only emptiness.
Cast dark words to the swirling breeze
to rivers of flowing silk.
Under ancient, lost, forgotten trees
silence softens insults ilk.
A home of moss and lotus flower
floats on freedoms lightest air.
Sweetest sleep, here, does not sour
long dead hopes will find you there.

Follow me to Shangri la your troubled soul find rest
while your gone I’ll guard for you the dearest and the best.

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  by Tatsujin

  Posted Aug 22, 2008
  +4
  I enjoyed the metaphysical references in each 4 line verse. The poem flowed rather effortlessly and felt like a soothing prayer
  
  When I see a sonnet, I like to see tighter line structure. I don't have to tell you that 13 or 14 syllables should be the aim, it really gives it a tight sy... (read more)

• Crowley
  Aug 23, 2008
  I know it's missing the iambic pentameter which means it is not strictly a sonnet, however, in accordance with the recent work of Simon Armitage the sonnet style has been manipulated beyond Shakespearean bounds i.e breaking the iambic pentameter, I'm glad you enjoyed it despite this discrepancy.
• WilleonCab
  Aug 23, 2008
  Well-written, though this isn't really what a sonnet is. Still, nice style.
• Treborsinna
  Aug 23, 2008
  nice poem, however it isn't a sonnet. it's got the 14 lines but you're missing the 10 syllable part. But who cares its a nice poem without those silly rules!
• blamninja1
  Aug 22, 2008
  Interesting piece. Good job.
• MysticDreams
  Aug 21, 2008
  This made me feel really relaxed, and open minded. I loved the work, and look forward to more!
• K8TheGr8
  Aug 21, 2008
  wonderful and enchanting. =)

• Date Added
• Aug 21, 2008 at 3:35 PM
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• Poetry
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• Fantasy
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