It was a nice enough poem, and the spacing to represent shape and motion was somewhat clever. It was a pretty cliche topic. I thought the sound effects used made the poem sound like it was written by a seventh grader. Some more colorful word choice would have made this sound a lot better, give a thesaurus a try. Although the spacing was a novel approach, it doesn't really add anything to the poem so I think it could have been avoided.
Put you hate on paper
They won’t know it’s you
All people are the same
Gain major fame
Sign here in blood
And you’ll win the game
It’ll sell well
But a trip to hell
Hell, what’s it matter
Have a bestseller
In your wallet now
Choose wisely
Poverty or riches
Your own bitches
Stop being one
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