Product Placement

I liked that the story stuck to the ironic purpose you created it for; that your character, despite his refusal to fall victim to the adverts, eventually sunk into and became what he had tried so hard not to become; a sap who buys everything that is shiny and a leading brand.

The story could have been longer, but I can't make anything longer than a page, so that is a very small downside.

Good story. A creative criticism of advertising, which is impossible to resist, hated by all and none.

Top notch editing and grammar. Easy to read, great choice of words, and had a consistent style. Kept me guessing with every sentence. It had a lot of interesting thoughts, and I felt that you put yourself into this which always adds value to any story.

It felt rushed, and the story didn't progress very smoothly. It went from one thing to another to quickly, and a couple times I wasn't sure what exactly was going on. It started off ranting about advertising then everyone was gone then everyone's having a party at Tescos. I understood what you were trying to do, but how you did it had me craving more.

The concept and idea overpowered the actual story. They just needed to compliment each other better. Overall, I enjoyed it. It's thought provoking! Yay.