Paschendale

Good story topic. Lots of good dialog. I enjoy war stories, and this was definitely enjoyable. I'd put more here, but I can't remember the beginning and middle of the story. I did enjoy the ending as well. It was very tastefully done, with the main guy getting injured and waking up later.

Holy shit that was long. That was hard to read through without losing interest. Also, there was one BBC Coding issue that I noticed, which if you really cared about your submission, you would read through it about 12 times to take care of it. The italics were also screwed up in my opinion in a few places. It seemed as though you wanted all journal entries italicized, and the first one the italics stopped half way through. Another thing is that quotation marks are there so signify dialog, italics weren't needed in my opinion for all the dialog, and if you are doing it for the dialog, make sure that you do it throughout the entire article, not just in places where you feel it to be important.

Shorten it, or submit it in chapters. Maybe also keep the italization consistent throughout the entire article. Good story. War setting was very well done.