Once Upon a Time / A Modern Lovesong

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Once Upon A Time

I'm looking round the corner, back to things I used to know,
Funny how time puts it in stark relief, but thats just the way that these things go,
Well I'm looking at photographs, and postcards I've been sent,
Trying to work out what they mean to me, but I'd settle for just what they meant.

Guess I'll always know that,
Once upon a time I had a future, and I guess I must be there, right about now,
And if here and now there's heavy weather, then I guess I'll hope to have one once again.

And I'm wondering to myself; surrounded by the ghosts of my friends,
Are they my enemies now? or is it just that some things never end,
But, whats the point in dreaming bout the past, when after all it's been and gone away,
And why do we think so much for the future, that we forget about living every day.

But I guess I know that,
Once upon a time things were different, though I still mean every word I ever meant,
It's just that words are fickle things I know, even when they're used with good intent,

So I ain't gonna think at all no more, makes it easier to bear,
If to all the silly things I do, I can just say that i don't care,
Some might say its lying, others could say it's wrong,
But if you'd care to listen, I could sing you a different song.

And you'd see that,
Once upon a time, I was younger, I guess i've played that game too many times,
There's only so many different words I could use, and maybe none of them could change your mind...


A Modern Lovesong

Walking 'long some old street someday
Met a pretty girl, and she said hey
I'm looking for somebody, you look the type
Pretty boy with an empty soul so can you meet the hype

Now i guess i may look empty, but pretty just ain't right.

I'm not empty, guess you just OD'd
You're looking for somebody think it might be me
Well honey heres my number but
I'll tell you what i'll say, you're pretty but

There's facts in life that just aren't on the internet
And there are things that you'll never see on tv
And if this modern love is as disposable as primark jeans
Then count me out honey; I'd rather go blind than have to see you this way.

But either way I aint sitting round here too long,
Gonna get my songbook out write a whole new song
She hasn't got back to me yet
Guess I'm too far down the alphabet,

b comes after a and all

I saw her on the bus the other day,
Smiled at her but she was looking the other way
I got to say, I love public transport
Anyone who rides buses knows how social they are

I guess theres more to life than drinking, 'til you pass out
And theres more to happiness than meets the eye
But if this modern love is just another designer drug
Then leave me with my music I'll be fine
Leave me with my music, and I'll be fine.

• BlueShizz
  Aug 12, 2008
  The first one was mediocre, but the second one was very well done! I agree with Matt when he stated that "I can feel the beats of the song..." as it had the same affect with me too. You should definitely post the songs if you ever get around to recording them.
• Manman
  Jun 14, 2008
  Wasn't a fan of the first one, but the second was really well timed. I normally avoid lyrics to songs, as they are never done as well as when they are applied to background music. But this stood on its own simply because you could bounce your head along with reading it and not lose the beat of it.
• Mathmo
  Jun 13, 2008
  I wouldn't mind a little clarification on that one - I feel personally that the verse before is slightly awkward, whereas I am only slightly displeased by the line about drinking. There was another verse before the second-to-last, but that got culled as being kind of irrelevant, and I certainly feel it kind of needs a replacement, maybe leading into the bus stanza. The drinking line just kind of fits nicely with the several drug references - another way of forgetting the hollow existence type thing... There may have been recordings in the past, but they are not yet published, and need rethinking, hopefully this summer I will have the time to properly record some of my songs, and I will post some links to vids if and when :-)
  Thanks for reading,
  Mathmo
• Matt
  Jun 13, 2008
  Very nice. Light and rhythmic. I can feel the beats of the song and that is good. Although I feel as if the last (or was it second to last) stanza of the second song felt a little awkward in content. It seemed as if the thing about drinking was just tossed in, and I wasn't expecting that. What I mean is, it felt like it needed a little more background. Please ask me if you need clarification. My thoughts are a little scattered. And if their are recordings of these songs I would love to hear them. I am a musician myself.

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