Kruller's Supermarket

This story literally made me laugh out loud, especially at the swearing gag, and I don't do that often. The humor was top notch, and the quality of which it was written reinforced it. I thought it flowed very smoothly and held my attention with ease. Great mechanics. I loved listening to your character rant, you made him sound very realistic.

The double store sentence threw me off a little as Caleb had said previously. I think the length was just about right for the average reader with the attention span of a squirrel, but I thought the story ended a little too soon for me. I would have liked to have read more of this funny story. The biggest joke came in the middle and the humor kind of slowed down from there. All these are very minor cons though, they didn't bother me hardly at all.

Great story, it will definitely get you laughing. Your a fantastic story teller and I'm really looking forward to your next submission. You've really got a handle on all the aspects of writing.

Very funny, well written, good vocabulary, and few (if any) grammatical errors. All in all, a fantastic story... and the ending, though somewhat abrupt, was still great. What's not to love? Honestly, I'm out of things to say. I liked it.

At only a few paragraphs, this story is pretty short, and not much really happened. In my opinion, the whole thing came across as a small piece of a larger story. Maybe that's what you wanted. Anyway, what you have here is good enough that I can't really complain about length. Let's just say I would have gladly read more if you had written it.

Although the story is short, this probably means that even the most impatient of readers could easily plow through this story without any loss of attention. That being said, I think this story will be getting a lot more votes than some of the longer articles being submitted here.

Perfect length for the story, short. Not too long or descriptive, making the imagination take lots of leeway throughout the story, which was good. Also, the ending was perfect, and the almost swearing at your boss is extremely accurate, though I just blatantly swear at him :D

There were a few language mechanics and grammar errors throughout the story, such as capitalization after a semi-colon, which is a no-no. Other than that, nothing real major to talk about.

Very well written story again by IamAdam. Top notch work! Perfect in length and quality. Hoping to see more stories from you in the future.

This story literally made me laugh out loud at times. The style of your dialog was very well done. Not only did it make me chuckle at parts, but it transitioned very well with the narration. The punchline was very cleverly done, and provided a great conclusion to the story. The overall length of the story was appropriate; not too long, not too short, but just long enough to make a great story.

There really isn't anything that I have to complain about. One thing that I sort of stuck out to me as I was reading was a double use of "store" in the sentence "Maybe picking up trash outside the store is what they have in store for me". I'm not sure if you meant it to be like that, but if you wanted to improve the flow, you could use a word synonymous to "store" in the first use. But really, I think I'm just being a way too picky.

So far from what I've been reading from you, it seems like your a natural at writing humor, and I'm definitely looking forward to more articles from you.