Grace

You're only 14. At least that's what the profile says.
For such a young age, your writing is well beyond what I would expect. The intro starts of with a good picture of who we're dealing with. The steamy little love scene pumps it up a little more. And then teenage immaturity craps all over it and they go for ice cream. I love it.

There is (always) room for improvement. You'd benefit from an editor. A few typos are running around in there, couple of garbled words, and then theirs the 4th paragraph aka a blatant run on sentence that kicks the story in the proverbial gut. Your stories would also benefit, once again here from a little back story.

Easy ways to boost up the story:

Instead of, "They went to a deserted ice cream stand, with a sole teenage employee.", "The couple drove to a local ice cream stand. The place was mostly deserted, save the one teenage employee manning the cash register." Says the same thing, but pumping it up with a little detail makes all the difference. We know you have the descriptive talent, so don't limit it to just one section of your tales.

I'm still baffled that at 14 you're writing like this. Just a couple of nitpicks which bring the overall story down from that top tier.

I know its summer right now, but during the school year, share your stories with your English, Grammar, Speech, Language, etc. teachers. These people didn't get into the job for the money and if they're any good, they'll spend a little time helping you become a better writer. Don't be discouraged from negative reviews as well: I'm pretty sure we're all here to help each other out.

i liked the story, like if you had told me that you were writing this and explained the outline I'd tell you it sounds like it's going to be a sweet piece.

the problem is that you skimmed like mad, i wanted to get into their passion but then they stopped, i wanted to get into their romance but then they left, and i wanted to feel fear, sorrow, regret, but it was all too fast. Instead I was just reading words.

you need to bulk it the hell up. i mean the crash was 4 lines, maybe 3 sentences, and shes dead. also as for your descriptions, they were detailed but didnt feel original, i didn't feel like i was hearing a person's voice, it sounded robotic almost