The first poem is probably the weakest one, while it has a good image, it's very awkward ("It shrinks to a dull......blue......pulse...") and contradictory, but perhaps that was intended.
the other two poems were pretty good, but with all three together it's just a bit awkward...not to mention confusing.
A lot individual parts were very strong, whereas, others simply were just a lot weaker...the whole thing seems off kilt, uneven really... Nice imagery though.
One thing unifying is the feeling and tone of uncertainty, of a struggle and turmoil that depicts something of a relationship or feeling for someone?
the ending of each doesn't seem conclusive either... there is no real point to it..
I haven't voted yet, since i can't decide how i feel about this... There are good and bad parts, but i don't know if null is the way to go...
Put you hate on paper
They won’t know it’s you
All people are the same
Gain major fame
Sign here in blood
And you’ll win the game
It’ll sell well
But a trip to hell
Hell, what’s it matter
Have a bestseller
In your wallet now
Choose wisely
Poverty or riches
Your own bitches
Stop being one
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