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2 Reviews
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Poetry in it's Purest Form
Posted Jun 15, 2008
The Pros
After reading this, I got the impression you really had a handle on how to write poetry. It was filled to the brim with metaphors and similes, and a playful choice of words. The descriptions were abstract, yet fit the subject. I got a really good understanding of what mood you were setting.
The Cons
As Soli had said, if hadn't known what the title was, I don't think I would have completely understood what you were talking about it. Your descriptions set-up a miserable and despairing setting, but that could apply to a lot things outside of anxiety.
Final Thoughts
This was true poetry. This was truly self-expression. You're almost as good as a fellow writer on here, Matt Houston. If you want to get some inspiration, try reading a few of his poems. I think you're a great writer and you know what you're doing, great job.
2 out of 2 people found this review helpful.
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Good. Vague.
Posted Jun 12, 2008
The Pros
You definately got your point across about how anxiety makes you feel. You broke up the length of the lines so it wasn't redundant. And it obviously was a personal experience and not a third-party account.
The Cons
Try to make your purpose more apparent in the poem. One of my Creative Writing teachers told me that, "The subject and purpose of your poem should be apparent in the poem itself, not the title." Which I think rings clear most of the time.
Final Thoughts
Very good idea and good overall. I look forward to seeing your skill as a writer improve (Not a negative comment by any means) Well done.
-Soli
4 out of 4 people found this review helpful.
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